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- VCW
- Vera Charline Wareham is my full name, and this blog is about my developing book, "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." Dreams and visions play a large role as the stories progress. This is not a novel, but a book. It is three different stories of the lives of three women--Song, the youngest ages from about five to fourteen throughout her stories; Cici is a middle aged hippie type; and Chyenne is the oldest, about sixty. Although Song changes the most in the years that pass, time changes all three on their journey to self-discovery. Their life paths cross in unusual and somewhat spooky ways. Each character's chapters will be sequential, but all character's chapters will be shuffled together--one of the reasons for the name "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." This is a predominantly nonfiction account of "Tangled Memoirs", which is the subtitle.
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9 comments:
That first one is intriguing. You "talking" to the bird? to the reader? We can all certainly be mesmerized by looking at inner reflections! It puts me in mind of when I wake up from some dreams ... holding on to their traces ...
The second is not quite as satisfying. Do you mean both you and the bird are "nervously peeping"? I'd say the bird, especially in this photo, is not ordinary. :-) And as written it tends to read as personifying the bird, which doesn't work for me. Love the photo, though.
I like the first one best too. I am trying to write verse that reflects something of the photograph and yet has a message that many readers may relate to. That is so in all of this series. The second one... I was personifying the bird and mirroring what I might say or think if I was him.
-VCW
You know... like
--I am he as you are he as you are me And we are all together
Maybe...
Nervously peeping
Beyond each other's thoughts
Window with a view
That might work except that you are attributing thought to the bird. (I know, I know, I can almost hear someone who just read what I did about current research showing how hard it is to maintain that animals don't have at least some rudimentary thinking processes.) Maybe that second line: Beyond each other's reactions, or maybe instead of reactions, goals? or "Around each other's presence..." ??? Yeah, that last comes close to it, maybe.
Nervously peeping
Beyond each other's presence
Window with a view
That's it! I'm gonna change it.
I really like when people are expressing their opinion and thought. So I like the way you are writing
Your blog keeps getting better and better! Your older articles are not as good as newer ones you have a lot more creativity and originality now. Keep it up!
And according to this article, I totally agree with your opinion, but only this time! :)
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