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- VCW
- Vera Charline Wareham is my full name, and this blog is about my developing book, "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." Dreams and visions play a large role as the stories progress. This is not a novel, but a book. It is three different stories of the lives of three women--Song, the youngest ages from about five to fourteen throughout her stories; Cici is a middle aged hippie type; and Chyenne is the oldest, about sixty. Although Song changes the most in the years that pass, time changes all three on their journey to self-discovery. Their life paths cross in unusual and somewhat spooky ways. Each character's chapters will be sequential, but all character's chapters will be shuffled together--one of the reasons for the name "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." This is a predominantly nonfiction account of "Tangled Memoirs", which is the subtitle.
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Not quite sure about this photo. The bird's action is not as clear as in others, like the direction it is flying in (or is it my aging eyes?)....
And "dive-bomb" pulled me up short, especially after "christen" in the first line. Maybe something like "dive right in" ????
OK, I'm taking a further liberty:
envision the dream
hold tight, dive right in
christen your wings
????
Hi Again, and your right again,
I will think on how to rework this one too. I like what you did. Can I claim it... if I use your edit? I can send you a card for every edit I use... The same card if I have it printed. I have a better image of this shot that is in the mail out I am sending in the 'Through My Window' newsletter. I may rework the image. The bird was dive bombing the window. No better word for what he was doing, but that doesn't necessary come though in the photo, so I will rethink it. Maybe just reworking the image to see his face clearer will be enough.
-VCW
Yes, I hear that what you actually saw when you took the photo was a dive-bombing. (I've seen it myself and always feared for the bird doing it.) However, once you are writing something to go with what you saw is where poetic license comes in. It's the same in writing dreamku, when we leave out or change something slightly to honor the poem that is emerging. I really only question "dive-bomb" in contrast to the overall tone I got from the piece which wasn't so harsh. What does someone else think? Ships, as I now think on it, are christened by breaking a wine bottle over their bows, which is pretty intense, too. So maybe I'm off the mark?
A christened ship is exactly what I was thinking of when I wrote the ku (or whatever the verse is). The image of a broken glass bottle as a ship sets sail, and the possible broken glass window as the dive-bomber breaks through its barrier. Maybe I should work on that aspect. How about this tanka-like verse.
Leave port with the tide
Dive-bomb into your dream
Shatter all barriers
Christen your wings with champagne
Surge with the water and air
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