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- VCW
- Vera Charline Wareham is my full name, and this blog is about my developing book, "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." Dreams and visions play a large role as the stories progress. This is not a novel, but a book. It is three different stories of the lives of three women--Song, the youngest ages from about five to fourteen throughout her stories; Cici is a middle aged hippie type; and Chyenne is the oldest, about sixty. Although Song changes the most in the years that pass, time changes all three on their journey to self-discovery. Their life paths cross in unusual and somewhat spooky ways. Each character's chapters will be sequential, but all character's chapters will be shuffled together--one of the reasons for the name "Patchwork Faces of the Moon." This is a predominantly nonfiction account of "Tangled Memoirs", which is the subtitle.
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The "Twist of Fire" inspired a color palette tribute:
http://www.colourlovers.com/palette/305875/A_Twist_of_Fire
Checked out the colourlovers website briefly. I don't have a lot of time for browsing, but it looks very interesting. You seem to have a lot going on through the internet. Thanks for the networking link.
This, along with Twist of Fire, is one of my favorites on this site so far.
May I make a small suggestion on wording here? "Shriek" seems a bit strong or not quite in keeping, of course I recognize you know what you are aiming for. Maybe you like the propulsion or force "shriek" gets across. (Or maybe the bird did really shriek. :-D) However, there may be another word. I'd say "sing," but that may not carry the force you want.
Wonderful work, vcw.
I have already changed this one in my newsletter message; I just haven't gotten around to changing it here yet. I can't remember exactly what I changed it to. I will go see.
-VCW
Be back...
I had changed the last line to ...
Screaming forever
I don't think that I like that much though. Maybe...
Feathers flaming
Sing with your Phoenix voice
Scream into the sky
What does anyone else think?
OK, I know I'm not "anyone else," LOL! But I'm going to put in another of my two cents. Scream is as harsh as shriek. You are the author and artist and I hear that you have a very different experience of the overall tone of this picture and poem than I do. :-) But I still keep wanting a softer word to describe the sound the bird makes. I'm flying with the bird, achieving a transformation and then that word "scream" drops me out of the sky. IMHO, always.
I do like the harshness of the shriek and scream (much like the sound of a hawk or an eagle is what I hear in the transforming to a new freedom), but... I do want to appeal to others. These verses are not just for me as my dreamku is. So... How about something like one of the two below...
Feathers flaming
Sing with your Phoenix voice
Turn to the sky
I not only want the words to appeal to many, but to somewhat describe the art. The beak is pointing toward the sky. Can you tell that? If not... maybe...
Feathers flaming
Sing with your Phoenix voice
A new song
-VCW
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